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The following content was a page on the Telford and Wrekin Council’s website. It has since been changed but this is what it said originally, and with the original formatting intact:

http://www.telford.gov.uk/Environment+and+planning/Environmental+health/

Advice, help and regulation on environmental and public health.

The main function of the service is to protect the health and wellbeing of the inhabitants of the Borough of Telford & Wrekin.
Environmental Health provides protection for people living in the borough, advising on issues such as food safety, safety in the workplace, noise control, blocked drains and control of polluting industry are provided.
We are able to investigate complaints across a range of problems such as noise, pollution, unfit food and audio or dog noise. In the course of our inspection of business premises for compliance with food, health and safety and pollution control legislation, we can offer extensive free guidance and advice about compliance.

This is very boring and unappealing so a better version, where the writing has been ‘Plain English-ed’ would be as follows:

Environmental Health is a service that protects the health and wellbeing of everyone who lives in the Telford and Wrekin area.
It provides protection for people by advising on things like food safety, safety in the workplace, noise control, blocked drains and by making sure that local industries are not polluting the area in any way.
We can investigate all sorts of complaints such as noise, pollution, unfit food and any persistent loud noises.
We inspect businesses to make sure they are keeping to the safety and pollution laws and offer them lots of free help to make sure that they know how to work within the law.

This final version is best of all as it has made use of bullet points as an easy way to highlight the most important points as follows:

Environmental Health is a service that protects the health and wellbeing of everyone who lives in the Telford and Wrekin area.
It provides protection for people by advising on things like:

• Food safety
• Safety in the workplace
• Noise control
• Blocked drains
• Making sure that local industries are not polluting the area in any way

We can investigate all sorts of complaints such as:

• Noise
• Pollution
• Unfit food
• Persistent loud noises

We inspect businesses and

• make sure they are keeping to the safety and pollution laws.
• offer them lots of free help to make sure that they know how to work within the law.